Descriptive Essay

  I walked into his room. He promised me to wait for me in his room by that time, but he was not there. So I decided to wait for him in his room. There was a small table beside the bed right next to the door, so I sat on the chair next to it. The table looked so old and there were many scribbles on it. On the table were a pencil case, an empty notepad, and a clock radio. I turned on the radio and tried to tune it, but only buzzing noise came from it. So I turned the radio off. Then I grabbed a pencil from the pencil case and wrote "I came here." on the notepad. Feeling bored, I stood up from the chair and looked aroung the room. Then I noticed that there was a bookshelf next to the table.
  On the bookshelf, there was a pile of books in an unorganized manner. I thought he put the books in this way because he did not have any time to neatly put the books into the bookshelf. So I organized the books for him. As I neatly put the books, I looked at the titles of the books. Surprisingly, the books were about economics. I was surprised to know that he was deeply interested to economics. Whatever, I neatly put the books into the bookshelf and walked toward his bed. The bed was against the wall and next to it was another small table. On the small table were a red reading lamp and a glass of water. Because I felt tired after re-organizing his books, I drank the water. Then I lied down on the bed and closed my eyes for a while. I could smell shampoo from his pillow as I lied down, but I did not put much attention to it. However, because a strange smell came from something in the room, I tried to look for it.
  There were dirty socks on the floor. Not only that, dirty laundry was overflowing the laundry basket next to the trash can at the corner of the room. The smell of dirty clothes was horrible so that I almost felt like throwing up. Anyway, I picked the dirty socks on the floor and then threw them at the laundry basket. Then I walked to the laundry basket and held it up and went out of the room. I put the basket outside there and came back to the room. Then I suddenly noticed that there were 3 posters of Green Day on the wall and concerts tickets on a dark notice board, fixed on the wall, right next to the posteres. I had a closer look at the posters and the tickets and found out that the concert is on this weekend. Then suddenly, my friend came into the room and apologized for being late. Then he told me to go to the Green Day concert with him and picked up the tickets on the board and gave one to me. Feeling happy, I thanked him and then came out of the room because it was near midnight.

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Every student can benefit from engaging in some extracurricular activity. Through extracurricular activities you learn to work and play harmoniously, to give and take, to win and lose. When you are a member of a club for instance, you are usually assigned with a job to finish. Then, you have to be responsible and cooperative to accomplish the job. Also it is possible for you to learn some new skills by doing jobs for the club, since those jobs may involve types of work that you have never done before. In addition, you may also be able to expand your perspective by engaging in diverse extracurricular activities and meeting many people. Thus, every student can definitely get something beneficial by being involved in extracurricular activities.